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Raw Flesh poem by ~zelfyr:iconzelfyr:





RAW FLESH
My life is filled with false love and hate
Much as I so desire it to not be...
There is light and dark, life and death.
Searing pain burns my flesh as the
Hatred seeps through it and into
The surrounding cool dense air.
As the blood rushes through my body
I feel the ever encroaching coldness
Overtaking and awakening the many
Long forgotten dark deadly desires
Which I have surpressed within me.
Vivid images of crimson-black blood
Escaping the confines of the skin, pass
In my mind and flash before my eyes.
Things of death stay within my dark soul.
Never allowing anything to escape
And become one with the ashes.
Entering into the dense memories
I sense the pain of deep sorrows.
That have lived their whole life in me.
I am but a broken shell of a person,
My essence has dispersed into space.
There is no true me living any longer.
I close my eyes and it reflects what
Only my soul knows to be a reality.
Death lives just beneath the flesh,
It awaits the time to become right.
To pounce upon a breathing being,
And take from it that which it desires.
The damp Earth then swallows me up,
Taking me deep within her bosom
And embraces me for all eternity.
I am most thankful for the end to be here..... V.Cloud
©2003-2008 ~zelfyr
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Submitted: January 26, 2003
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Sitting here alone and thinking how good it would be, to not be.

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~blueskys:iconblueskys: Jan 26, 2003, 2:52:24 PM
Yes....it is very raw! Emotion-filled! Very well written!

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~aural-autumn:iconaural-autumn: Jan 26, 2003, 2:58:42 PM
I sense the pain of deep sorrows.
That have lived their whole life in me

this is most real to me and my fav part...it is a very strong poem and I can sense the feelings you have put into it. I like your use of many descriptive words...such as dark deadly desires and dense memories, deep sorrows, etc. Very good, and I have missed you!! Tif

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~neywon:iconneywon: Jan 26, 2003, 4:19:53 PM
Deeply and tragicly emotional. Like a dark sun rising over a desolate soul, torn tattered and left bare to the elements. So sad that so much of our lives is shaped by hurt and betrayal.

Very well written, I love it.
~croniee:iconcroniee: Jan 30, 2003, 9:11:39 AM
YAY, I finally heard something from you, great work, once again, I really like how you just jump right into the unforgettable parts of life, its like they're always there waiting. Great work once again.

Oh be sure to stop by my other account sometime, its all written work, just take a look at "cloniee"


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*e-dragon:icone-dragon: Feb 2, 2003, 11:18:38 AM

Nice work, a lot of feeling in it....


The flicker of the soul desirers to be set free. To be the only light in the darkness to be seen, but only by a few that seek to see it or to be a light within the light and seem to be invisible, but in reality seen buy all, in both the darkness and the light........

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~marduk:iconmarduk: Feb 25, 2003, 2:25:47 AM
It seems to me that the world's populous is so full of dark thoughts and feelings, almost entirely out of reaction to same. It has been like a disease, spawned who knows where and then spreading throughout us all... Indeed we are one creature, the great Gaia, each of us a vital organ/tissue in her eternal body, and the image of a disease is appropriate. Though, to end that role is not likely to find her pleasure. Rather, just as we would not like for a hand to grasp a knife and remove itself, she too would most likely be offended by such an action... Life is sacred, even if it is also suffering. The First Noble Truth: Life /is/ suffering. The Fourth Noble Truth: "suffering" (craving, greed, etc) can be annihilated.

There I go on tangents again...

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~bloodrosesociety:iconbloodrosesociety: May 13, 2003, 5:18:44 PM
Wonderfully dark! Amazing work, really ^^

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!merkywave:iconmerkywave: May 23, 2003, 9:00:57 AM
"But Beautiful, and im thinking if you were mine, i'd never let you go"...
*livedead:iconlivedead: Jul 13, 2003, 11:54:32 PM
Thats some heavy shit Gigi.
Really great.
Hug
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